Sunday, April 3, 2016

Rainbow Snippets: On Bear Mountain

I'm working on a better title for this one. I'd written it as a submission for a fairy tale styled submission and it wasn't accepted, so I have a nice 4k story that I'm determining what to do with. It's compact, and meant to be short, and needs an overall edit. (An edit by me to make it better, and an edit by someone who isn't me to see the things I can't see.) I may make it a free read, or do something experimental with it. I'm still thinking it over.

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"Hayden, can you speak?"

Hayden gasped in air and shook his head to clear the crumbles of dirt from his eyes. "Russ?" The ground beneath his body was cold, and past Russ he could see the branches of the trees coated in ice. The freezing rain and hardened hail had ceased, leaving icy traces of its destruction.

"I'm okay," Hayden croaked out, and then wrapped his arms around Russ and kissed him.

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10 comments:

  1. Sounds like Hayden and Russ have just survived a harrowing ordeal! :-)

    RE: Your search for beta-readers. Are you a member of the MM Romance group on GoodReads (https://www.goodreads.com/group/show/20149-m-m-romance)? If not, you might consider joining, then inquire on their beta-reading thread.

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    1. There was a bit of excitement just before those 6 sentences.;)

      RE: I don't believe I am -- thank you for the resource!

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  2. Sounds like they're taking comfort in each other. I wonder what just happened.

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    1. They had a bit of excitement...but that would take more than 6 sentences to get into! :)

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  3. I'm curious as to what happened just before this.

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    1. Thank you! I'm working on editing the rest to put up as a free read at some point. :)

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  4. Great snippet. Am curious about what happened to put them in that situation -- whatever it was, I think they're just happy that they're both still alive.

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    1. Thank you! They are definitely very happy to be alive! The rest is still in edits, and will be a free read at some point.

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  5. Now I'm curious about what got them to this point!

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  6. Thank you! The rest is still getting some editing done on it, but will be a free read at some point.

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